I love pieces like this that convey rather than tell. So much going on here for the reader to sort out. I would like to think that they "postponed" their trip to the library that day. Their books are overdue.
Hi Jim, I'm glad you liked it. I originally wrote it as a one-sentence story. I'd read Gabriel Garcia Marquez's Last Voyage of the Ghost Ship which is one long sentence running across several pages. That's a magic realism story so quite different in content. But writing one long sentence created an interesting fluid prose style. I then went and gave it standard punctuation and sentence structure later without changing the wording much. And yes, it would be nice to think they postponed their trip!
I love pieces like this that convey rather than tell. So much going on here for the reader to sort out. I would like to think that they "postponed" their trip to the library that day. Their books are overdue.
Hi Jim, I'm glad you liked it. I originally wrote it as a one-sentence story. I'd read Gabriel Garcia Marquez's Last Voyage of the Ghost Ship which is one long sentence running across several pages. That's a magic realism story so quite different in content. But writing one long sentence created an interesting fluid prose style. I then went and gave it standard punctuation and sentence structure later without changing the wording much. And yes, it would be nice to think they postponed their trip!